Students escape from making the rough structure of the essays because:
· It’s a waste of time
· I can develop points during writing
· It is unimportant to see the structure in full
However, I have seen very few students who were able to write well without making the rough structure.
You can overcome all the above-mentioned issues through practice and spend no more than 3 minutes (max) in making the rough structure of the essay.
Therefore, I and my students enjoy essay discussions because both of us introduce ideas which are new to each other.
In developing the rough structure, follow the following steps:
· Write from 3 to 4 words per point,
· Develop ideas for the introduction, supporting reasons, and sub-details,
· Paraphrase repetitive words.
See example below:
IELTS Essay (General)
Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Rough Structure
Computers have more negative effects on the young children
INTRODUCTION
Synonym: computer (or digital technology)
Strongly agree
BODY
Reason 1 – Poor reading
Detail 1 – Weakens eye nerves
Explanation – Digital screen reading
Example – 3 to 4 hours reading on tablets
Detail 2 – Poor eyesight
Explanation – Children may need stronger eyeglasses in future
Example – Playing games sore eyes
Reason 2 – Isolation
Synonym: Isolation (or alone)
Detail 1 – No social circle
Explanation – No real friends
Example – Facebook peers
Detail 2 – Cannot learn from elders
Explanation – Mostly make wrong decisions
Example – Download costly software
Conclusion – Disadvantages are more
Paraphrase Reason 1 and Reason 2
STUDENT’S COMPLETE ESSAY (6 Band by IELTS Tutor)
INTRODUCTION
General statement
Nowadays, most of the youngsters use computers daily.
Specific statement
Apart from advantages of using computers regularly, there are more disadvantages.
Thesis and Pathway
I strongly agree as it causes poor reading skills and self-isolation.
BODY
Reason 1
Topic sentence
First of all, digital screes produce bad effect on their reading skills of the children.
Detail 1
Explanation
Example
For example, they spend 3 to 4 hours per day on tablets to study.
Detail 2
Furthermore, electronic equipment weakens eyesight.
Explanation
They may need stronger glasses in future.
Example
For instance, if they are playing games on their computer for a
long time of period, their eyes may soar.
Summary
Overall, laptops and other desktop screens are bad for children’s eyes.
Reason 2
Topic sentence
Another drawback of computers is that children may isolate themselves.
Detail 1 + Explanation
This is because social media may restrict these children to virtual friends only.
Example
To illustrate, young age students only have Facebook or Instagram fans.
Detail 2
Furthermore, they may not be able to learn from their elders.
Explanation
Consequently (as a result), most of the time, they make wrong decisions.
Example
For instance, when they are alone with their laptop, they can download
the costly software or purchase expensive stuff online.
Summary
Overall, young ones miss the family gathering because of too much use of personal computers.
CONLCUSION
In conclusion, it is clear that there are more disadvantages to youngsters for using the laptops.
Paraphrase Reason 1 and Reason 2
The main issues are that the they will struggle to read papers and face difficulty in giving time to their family.
Lesson to be learnt
As you can see for yourself, that the ideas will be automatically aligned and adding coherent language such as furthermore, moreover etc., meaningfully would be much easier.
Hence, always make the rough structure before writing the IELTS Essay.
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